LOVE IT!!! I can see why you are asking for critiques for your work, you simply want to know how it is being perceived. Gotta say I love your work! Being your friend would be the best!! I'd love to be an eye model for you if you lived in Melbourne, Australia haha ..
Keep up the good work, I put originality as 4.5 simply because it's not as intense as the rest of the work I've seen from you. But I could definitely see a lot of women wanting this look for themselves.